Wednesday, February 16, 2011

another sentence.


In the garden at the beginning, there was a lush, centered tree—a tree containing a serpent, subtle in its reiteration of God’s words to Eve, she, naked and craving an act that would make her more like this God, who kept His eyes away as her teeth split an apple’s skin, passed next to Adam who bit into it also, letting the juice and Eve’s saliva intermingle on his tongue, which fondled the apple’s flesh, signifying a new awareness of their own flesh and their mortality too, the couple now open-eyed and vulnerable to death. The apple was delicious.

11 comments:

  1. don't you wish the apple was distasteful? i wish i didn't "crave an act that would make her more like this God".

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  2. Hmmm...thinking of you and praying for you.

    side note: Congrats on your new job.

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  3. Yeah. The apple often doesn't bitter in your mouth until a little while after.

    Beautiful writing, Bayley.

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  4. Truth. We exchanged the truth for a lie. We sought after our own glory, and our own pleasure, making the ugly and rotten fruit appear as a ripe and beautiful thing destined for our taste buds.

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  5. Lyrics from one of my favorite songs.

    "Oh, my God, how you make it hard not to pick the apple, pick the apple....but Lord I long to give it back! Cause I was on shaky land, lost and unsure, I opened my hand and she held it like sinking sand.

    All, all, all of my life is for You. Home, home's anywhere You are too. So take this, one fallen man on His knees, saying please...Forgive Me"

    If I were Adam or Even in the garden...I can imagine the shame or regret they were feeling after giving in to the serpent and the apple. My response might have been something like these lyrics.

    I actually wrote a blog on this subject a while back with a video included of the song "Forgive Me". Here is a link to it in case you're interested in reading it. So many thoughts can stem from your "sentence" above =)
    http://charitylarecia.blogspot.com/2011/01/forgive-me.html

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  6. ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo this is cooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooool

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  7. Hey Bayley!! Im so excited to be a part of Cirlces with you. I have been behind on blogs since I have been gone but I just went through and read all of yours. It is awesome to see how God is transforming you and I'm excited to see where He leads you. I am praying for you! Also, your poems are amazing. I love this one especially picturing what it must have been like in the garden. I look forward to reading more of your poems :)

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  8. great syntax. quite the wordsmith.

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  9. You have a unique perspective. I'm curious to see more things from your angle. I would love to encourage and challenge you to look even deeper. Ha ha ha this is reading wrong, what I mean to say is that this seems to come very easy to you, and its already super deep! Id love to see/hear/read MORE from your perspective... dang it we should just chat in person!

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